Thursday, April 25, 2013

Chapter 1 Part 2

So I took your suggestion and I expanded Chapter 1


That night as Matron tended to his bruises and scrapes after his fight with Jack Hunter was thinking about the Choosing Day. He wanted to be a Guerir just like his father was but he knew that Jack had a far better chance than him to be accepted into the Battleschool at Castle Montcalm where Sir Robert taught his students.

            How could he ever get into Battleschool? He wasn't bulky, he wasn't strong and he wasn't tall. He was just a small lanky kid. The exact opposite of what the Battleschool wanted. He thought of the other options he had in the future. He really wanted to become a Guerir but it was unlikely. He was the worst in his class at writing other than Jack so it was impossible become an Acca and teach people as a scholar.  And then there was the Jaeger who no one really cared about.

            Not many people knew what business they did. Everyone respected them, but they didn't know what they actually did. They were few discussions about the Jaeger even though the Jaeger, alongside the Acca and the Guerir were the most highly respected placements in all of Konquelore. No other jobs seemed to be of importance to him. Hunter wanted to be a hero, not a lousy farmer hoeing in the sun all day or a plump cook, always in the galleys of a ship caught in the churning waves.

            It was that night that Hunter continued to whisper to himself “I will become a Guerir. I will fight for Castle Montcalm. I will prevail.” Thoughts of his father cheering on the battlefield raising his sword in victory deepened his beliefs that he would follow in his father’s footsteps and become a great warrior. But there were also thoughts of failure and the rest of his life being an outcast and begging for 1 or 2 pieces of copper from the people who already were broke from King Mordon’s taxes. He eventually fell asleep, wondering what fate God had bestowed upon him.

            The next day, Hunter was out of bed before any of the other woke up, even before Matron. In the morning, none of the kids could find Hunter inside his cot or the breakfast table. Finally Matron screamed “HUNTER!!!” and Hunter ran in the front door sweating like a pig.

“Yes, Matron?” he asked, panting for breath.

“Why are you outside in the morning with beads of perspiration running down your face when you’re supposed to be eating breakfast?” Matron demanded.

“Sorry Matron, I was training for the Choosing Day.”

“Very well, you may come inside for breakfast now Hunter.” Matron walked back inside with Hunter trailing her to the breakfast table where everyone sat. Many kids were surprised that Matron’s face wasn't red from anger and Hunter eyes weren't brimming with tears. Of all the people Jack was the only one seething as Matron and Hunter both knew that no people were allowed outside the ward before the morning bell rang.

Even so, no one dared to question Matron’s decision to let Hunter go on this occasion. Hunter received many questioning looks at the breakfast table until he couldn't stand it anymore. “Is there a reason you guys are all staring at me like that?” he asked to all of them.

“Well, let’s see. You weren't inside the Ward in the morning, which is against the rules. Then you talk to Matron and come out unscathed after breaking a very straightforward rule at the Ward.” answered Melody.

            Hunter didn't know how to respond to Melody’s answer so he backed off and returned his gaze to his bowl of slimy oatmeal and slice of stale bread. Whenever Hunter had spare time for the next two days, he was to be found training outside for who knows what. He kept to himself and talked to no one when not required.

            Jack consistently jeered at him for his strange behavior until once Matron taught him while he was taunted him for his lack of strength. Jack scowled at him, know very well that Matron could see and hear him he said “Next time, weakling.” As she called him inside and hiding his face from view, Hunter let a grin spread across his face.

Thursday, April 18, 2013

Chapter 1: The Ward

This is my first blog.. hope you guys like it!


           As thunder rages outside the Ward, for the millionth time Hunter was so glad that a stranger brought him to the Ward in the Montcalm Fief as he woke up. It was all Hunter had ever known. His Father had been a Guerir or a warrior in the Army of Konquelore, Hunter’s home country and he died soon after Hunter was born and his mother died in childbirth as he was told. He didn’t know much about the world outside of the ward and the clearing in front.
           
            The past few days, Hunter was having some trouble sleeping as his Choosing day was soon. This was when he and his friends would be assigned their future roles in life. Every child in Konquelore did this on the last day of their twelfth year. If you didn’t get chosen, you were an outcast. Outcasts were nothing. In fact they were less than nothing. They were the beggars on the cobblestone paths asking for some copper coins. Hunter didn’t want to become an outcast. He wanted to become a Guerir just like his father was. “I could be a legend!” were one of the constant thoughts about Hunter’s dream to becoming a Guerir.

            Hunter was getting a beating from Jack, the tough guy at the Ward in the grassy clearing. They constantly got into fights. Jack was always fighting with his fists and Hunter always fighting with his words. Hunter knew that he was no match with Jack in a fistfight but he realized too late. Soon enough, the 2 were beating each other down to the floor while their friends could only stand by and watch Jack beat Hunter to a pulp. Jack went in for the big punch and…

Suddenly, “STOP!” yelled Matron, the supervisor of their section of the Ward as the slammed the frail wooden door behind her. Normally Matron was quite nice and treats Hunter and everyone else quite well at the Ward. But she wasn't if there was violence. If Hunter and Jack start fighting, they’re dead meat once Matron finds out.

“He started it!!!” they said in unison. Hunter and Jack pointed at each with startled looks on their faces, as they hadn’t realized Matron had walked into the room.

“Both of you to your cots… NOW.” ordered Matron.
           
            The 2 boys slowly dragged themselves onto their cots, throwing mean looks at each other all the way there. Hunter knew that this wasn’t the time to get into big trouble since the Choosing day was only 3 days away so he didn’t bother to cause more trouble even though you could see the effects of the fight from the bloody nose and bruises all over his body.